2010年6月大學英語四六級考試寫作全面解讀(8)

　　第五章 實戰演練——四級作文模擬訓練及范文

　　模擬訓練一

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled The Popularity of Getting Certificates on Campus. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below.

　　1.大學校園內各種證書的報考十分火熱;

　　2.大學生考證的利弊;

　　3.考證面前，我的選擇。

　　The Popularity of Getting Certificates on Campus

　　模擬訓練二

　　Directions:

　　1. 上圖所示為我國吸毒者年齡分布情況，請描述其變化;

　　2. 請說明發生這些變化的原因;

　　3. 這一變化對社會和個人的。

　　模擬訓練三

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic Campus Security. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:

　　1)近年來發生在校園的意外事件不斷增加，校園安全問題備受關注;

　　2)對此我們應該采取哪些措施。

　　Campus Security

　　參考范文

　　模擬訓練一

　　【范文】

　　The Popularity of Getting Certificates on Campus

　　Recently, getting certificates has been brought into focus.The advertisements for training schools occupy a large proportion of the bulletin board, and booksellers fill their shelves with many reference books.And eager students spare their money and time for these courses and books.

　　Getting Certificates has been beneficial in several aspects.The most important one is that with more certificates, students have access to more and better job opportunities.In addition, they can make more contacts with the outside world in the course of getting certificates.However, every coin has two sides.The pursuit of certificates is no exception.Some students believe that the more certificates, the better it is.Getting certificates make the students become bookish easily.Some of them even neglect their routine learning in the process of getting certificates.

　　As for as I’m concerned, certificates certify students’ previous efforts.But whether these pieces of paper can benefit students or not, depends on what they have really gained.Therefore, before dazzling choices, we must have a clear attitude and scientific strategy, and then certificates are beneficial.

　　【點評】

　　文章以描述大學校園內各種證書的報考十分火熱這一現象開始進入主題，逐步分析大學生考證的利弊，最后說明考證面前，我的選擇。a large proportion of，make more contacts with，dazzling choices，have a clear attitude and scientific strategy等精彩句式的搭配使用，使文章增色不少。

　　模擬訓練二

　　【范文】

　　On Drug Addicts

　　As is shown in the graph above, we can see clearly that great changes have taken place in the age distribution of drug addicts.To be concrete, the teenage addicts only made up 10 percent of all the drugsters in 1982 while the ratio rose up to 65 in 2002.

　　What has caused this problem? It seems to me that there are three reasons.First, teenagers’ fearless curiosity about everything new has led some of them into this marsh.Second, many of the young addicts turned for the first time to drugs for escape either from their failure in the national entrance exams or from their parents’ breakup.And above all, our education in the harmfulness of drugs has been far from adequate to build teenagers’ sound resistance to drugs.To sum up, the causes mentioned above must call for more of our concern.

　　From the description above, we might have an overall understanding of the serious situation of drug addicts.For one thing, drug-taking does great damage to the health of drug users.For another, some drug users commit robbery or even murder their parents and relatives to get money to buy drugs, which poses a great threat to the social security and the social stability.Therefore, it is urgent for us to put an end to this trend.

　　【點評】

　　該預測題為社會熱點話題，四級考試命題作文常考題材。本文屬于圖表作文的寫作。根據四級圖表作文命題規律，第一段文章描述了圖表中所反映的我國吸毒者年齡的分布最近二十年的變化情況;第二段說明了產生這種變化的原因;最后一段陳述了吸毒無論是對個人的身體健康還是對社會的安全穩定都構成了巨大的威脅，并作出呼吁。文中亮點詞匯有to be concrete，rose up to，call for more of our concern，have an overall understanding of，commit robbery，poses a great threat to，put an end to等等，為文章添彩。

　　模擬訓練三

　　【范文】

　　Campus Security

　　Security issue may sound cliched, but when it comes to the campus security, we have to take it seriously.Nearly every day, there are reports to the security office on campus that valuable things are stolen away.A surrounding with stealing, mugging can’t be worse for studying.In such cases, what measures should be taken to improve the campus security?

　　Above all, we students should strengthen our security awareness.Once we smell out something unusual, we should report it to the campus guard immediately.In addition, more equipment such as monitors should be installed on campus so as to detect crimes as soon as possible.Besides, a proper amount of security guards should be arranged to patrol the campus.

　　As to me, campus security will be improved as long as efforts are made on campus.Therefore colleges and universities should exert their best efforts to make everyone on campus safe and sound.

　　【點評】

　　文章以描述校園安全出現的問題進入主題，逐步引申到應該及時采取措施，最后進行展望，提出號召。文章第二段使用On the one hand，On the other hand介紹解決問題的方法，使文章意思表達簡潔明了。本文使用了一些精彩的語言及句式，例如：In such cases, what measures should be taken to…, strengthen our security awareness, exert their best efforts to, safe and sound等，使文章更具文采。