同等學力英語作文批改：第59期

　　同等學力英語作文原文

　　Text message

　　There is no denying the fact that text message is an hotly detandly topic in china today. Some people think it is a blessing, while others regard it as a hell.

　　Personally, I believe that both sides have something right. On the one hand, we have to admit that text message can play an important role when we cannot talk with others. On the other hand, we should not neglet the disadvantage of text message, some uneffective text message full with our daily life .Some of messages are not what we need. When we look at that, they kill our time, and make us angry sometimes.

　　Personally, I think that both sides have something right. Actually, text message should be viewed as a two-edged sword, which presents us with both benefits and troubles. But we should not give up eating for fear of choking. The best policy, as I see it, is to maximize their advantages and eliminate their unhealthy side-effects. Or in other words, we should further develop text message and exert proper supervision over them so that they can benefit us in a better way.

　　評語：得分8-10分

　　該文基本滿足寫作要求，比較清晰的陳述清楚了自己的觀點并提出了相應簡短的論據，句式使用比較靈活，可以恰當使用連接詞等給文章增色。

　　缺點是：

　　1、注意了語言的靈活，但是有些忽視準確性，有些詞語的誤用；

　　2、在闡述內容的時候，內容有些重復，略顯單薄。

　　希望你在今后的學習中加以注意！