同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文批改：第58期

　　同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文原文

　　Today,more and more people come to the some big cities in China .Especially Beijing,shanghai and guanggzhou.With a lot of populations comeing into mang the cities,most social problem begin to infect to cities.

　　Fristly because people who come into cities have few teachnology that adapt to cities,so they most have unemployment many crimes in cities.Secondly,when more and more people begin to live in the cities,the price of house will rapidly increase too.At last,with most people coming to cities,many conditions of cities,such as triffics,educationgs,medicals and so on.

　　In my view,the causation is the unbalance of social development between the east and west in China.If we bring forward many ways to shorten the gaps between the east and the west,most people wouldn’t leave their hometwons and move to the big cities.

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