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　　My View on the Rush to Cities

　　With the development of economy, more and more people rush into big cities. Some want to find a good job and earn more money to raise their quality of life, some want to get better education, others come only because that they don’t want to be a farmer.

　　Following that fact, some questions have happened. Owing to the increasing population of big cities, the housing and traffic problem are become more serious. The pressure of employment and education in big cities is also strengthen.  And the rush of the country people to cities also leads to the rise in crime and over crowd..

　　How to solove these problems. The first step I think is that the government should take effective measures to control the population and make them live orderly. The second step is that some opportunities should be created for the country people to receive education and improve their life. Finally, the government may use some good policy to encourage country people to stay home. Therefore people in the country can live better and better.

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　　文章的大方向能夠把握住，但是有些不盡合理的地方，段應該闡明大量人群涌入城市帶來很多問題這個事情，第二段論述主要的具體的問題第三段提出建議，看法。可是你的段并沒有陳述這個問題。動手寫之前一定要注意認真審題。另外注意語言表達和語法問題，多看看范文學習語言表達的技巧。加油啊。