同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文批改：第74期

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　　Text Message
   
　　In recent years, with the rapid development of IT and information industry, text message plays a dominant role in people’s life. However, like everything else, it is known that text message has both advantages and disadvantages.
   
　　On the one hand, the text message makes our life wonderful and shortens the distance between people. By sending regards to them via text message, we can not only maintain contact with our friends and relatives, but also share pleasure with them. On the other hand, the text message is  convenient for people to keep up with the latest information they need whatever they go and whatever they do. Attracted by its low cost and powerful functions even colorful images are allowed to be shared between two users nowadays.
   
　　However, just as every coin has two sides, the text message also has its disadvantages. As can be expected, subways, buses, offices, even toilets find fingers on various mini keyboards for the same purpose. It’s harmful for people’s health and waste of time.
   
　　In my opinion, no doubt that it’s wonderful as it makes our life colorful. If we make proper use of it, text message will never do us more harm than good.

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