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　　The text message

　　When it comes to the text message, opinions differ from person to person. Some people claim that it is a blessing, while others regard it as a hell. I agree with the former.

　　Firstly, the text message is cheaper than the calling. Secondly, the text message is means of convenient and quiet communications. For example, when you attend conference you have a critical thing to tell the person who is in the same place or in the diverse area. You can send him or her text message in order to avoid disturbing other people. Last but not least, the text message is one of the available passing information means. We live in the world which has a lot of information. For example, I work in a commercial corporation and there are enormous data about economy like CPI, GDP and so on. I receive thirty messages or so everyday and I can read a lot of information if I have not enough time to see in the web or in the newspapers.
　
　　Nevertheless, as every coin has two sides, the text message also has some disadvantages, Such as the advertisement and not valuable information to us. The government can adopt the measures to limit the person who send this message. To sum up, the text message is a good thing.

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