同等學力英語作文批改：第62期

　　同等學力英語作文原文

　　Text messaging

　　There is no denying the fact that text message has been a hotly debated topic in China at present. Some people think it is a blessing, while others regard it as a hell. Just as a two-edged sword, text message present us benefits and troubles. On the one hand, as a new delivering system, text message provides us a convenient way to communicate with each other. On the other hand, sometimes, some advertisements and unhealthy messages are delivered by text message. How should we treat with text message?

　　As far as I am concerned, we should not go to the extreme. Weighing benefits and troubles brought to us by text message, I believe that the former has more than the later. Firstly, text message can shorten the distance among people. We can communicate with our friends who live in another province by text message. Secondly, text message gives us a way to increase our living and work efficiency considerably. We convey a text message within a few minutes, while it takes us several days to received a letter delivered by post office.

　　Indeedly, text message brings us some disadvantages such as useless advertisements, unhealthy messages which may waste our time or money or even lead some teenagers to commit a crime. Personally, we should not give up eating for fear of choking. It is important that laws and regulations be made out by the government to ban the unhealthy message’ deliverling. On the other hand, we must enhance the public’s awareness of privilege protection and the teenager should be educated to resist the unhealthy message. With the effective measures and alert public, it is reasonable for us to believe that text message will serve us in a better way.

　　評語：得分9-11分

　　該文比較好的完成了寫作要求，文章立意明確，語言表達比較流暢，句式變化較靈活。

　　缺點是，

　　1. 若干單詞錯誤，注意積累比較地道的英語表達法。

　　2. 文章字數過多，這在評卷中是會扣分的。