同等學(xué)力英語作文批改：第41期

　　同等學(xué)力英語作文原文

　　There is no denying the fact that it is a hotly debated topic in china today whether lucky numbers bring good luck. Some time ago, a piece of news say that lucky numbers bring good luck. To this issue people’s attitudes differ sharply. Some people may claim that lucky numbers really bring good luck. Others, however, may think otherwise.

　　In my opinion, I believe that lucky numbers can never bring good luck to a person. In the first place, the numbers is only a normal number and it doesn’t make any sense. Secondly, a good lucy is a thing and it comes from person’s efforts. If you don’t work hard, you don’t have a good opportunity. Last but not least, our furtune is in our own hands.

　　To sum up, lucky number should not be bring good luck. Anyway, lucky numbers is a desire for person. To acquire great success, you must work hard. So we always remember that no pains,no gains.

　　名師點(diǎn)評(píng)：9—10分

　　文章基本涵蓋了內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，但是在段中題目只要求你表述認(rèn)為數(shù)字和好運(yùn)有關(guān)的觀點(diǎn)，你寫的不同的人有不同 的觀點(diǎn)，似乎是多余的。

　　另外，文中出現(xiàn)了一些語法錯(cuò)誤以及句子表達(dá)欠妥當(dāng)?shù)默F(xiàn)象導(dǎo)致分?jǐn)?shù)降低，今后的復(fù)習(xí)中要多看看范文，學(xué)習(xí)其中的結(jié)構(gòu)安排，句子表達(dá)等，多注意語法小細(xì)節(jié)的復(fù)習(xí)。加油啊。