同等學力英語作文批改：第10期

　　同等學力英語作文原文：

　　My view on Reform of Medical Care in China 

　　At present ,China  there is a high medical expenses and medical care difficult problem.We often hear that a family because of a sick family member in need of assistance not afford to buy  drugs and to see a doctor.

　　The first reason for these problems is majorier of the chinese people have no medical  insurance. Some malignant diseases or long—term chromic diease,medical costs are fully borne by households often leaves the family impoverished by hospitalization. The second reason is that the proportion of people to doctor is too low.

　　In our opinion, the fundamental measure is to allow everyone health insurance. In this  way ,those  who suffer from the malignant dieases and patients with long–term chronic dieases will greatlly reduce the burden on the family. Then we should add the mumber of hospital and doctor. the last one is that different disease will go to different  hospital  .A minor defect  should go to a community hospital, while the difficult cases go to high–level hospital.

　　老師評語：得分6-8分

　　該文基本上可以表述清楚寫作意圖，段落結構比較清晰明了，可以較正確的使用基本句型。

　　缺點是：

　　1. 語言基本功不扎實，稍微復雜一點的表達就會出現錯誤。需要溫習一下句法。

　　2. 單詞拼寫錯誤太多，連續的錯誤表明你確實不會寫那個單詞，而不是筆誤，那就要加強單詞背誦的工作。

　　3. 中式思維，基本上都是按照中文意思直接翻譯成英文。需要訓練英文思維習慣。

　　盡管問題很多，只要堅持練習，還是會有所突破！再接再厲！