同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文批改：第95期

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　　The increasing number of people coming to the city
 
　　There is no denying the fact that it has become a prevailing trend for people to come to the city. Reports are often heard about the population of the city has grown faster and faster. Actually, the phenomenon has been so widespread that it has caused a series of social problems.
 
　　Obviously, it might have led to a large quantity of problems. For instance, the house price has become more expensive, the traffic has become heavier, the situation of environmental pollution has become more serious and the management of public security has become more difficult.
 
　　To this phenomenon, personally, I believe that we should not go to extremes. On the one hand, it must be admitted that with the boom of Chinese economy the step of urbanization is essential and necessary. On the other hand, it really has caused a series of problems. In conclusion, the phenomenon should be viewed as a two-edged sword, which has both merits and flaws. Of course, we should not give up eating for fear of choking. Instead, we should exert proper supervision over it and let it serve us better.

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　　文章的大方向能夠把握，語(yǔ)言十分流暢，層次也比較清楚，但是最后一段是自己的觀點(diǎn)沒錯(cuò)，可是盡量應(yīng)該提出一些解決的方法比較好，你并沒有提出具體的方法，第二段的問題想的比較好，但是應(yīng)該選擇其中2-3個(gè)稍微詳細(xì)的論述一下比較好，顯得文章比較飽滿，緊湊。多看看范文。加油啊。