同等學力英語作文批改：第51期

　　同等學力英語作文原文

　　There is no denying the fact that there is an increasingly number of people who tend to go to big cities.Some people want to earn more money,others may like the modern buldings or tracfics which brings convenience to them.Some problems happens following it.

　　A lot of problems happened after the sharply increasingly people,but the following is the most obvious ones.First of all is tracfic blocking.It can be seen that more cars and walkers happen to come out on road,which makes the tracfic burdening too heavy.Secondly,the limited house can not afford the sharp increasingly number of people.Therefore, more people can not buy a house to live because of the soar house price .Last but not least,the scienty safty become seriously bad.For example,a lot of person were stolened or robbed outside.

　　Personerly,I think it is a trend of development of societyThe people from country side help to buld the beautiful city.we should not neglect the importance of them.If laws and regulations can be built to result the problem they had bringed,it will be all right for us all.

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