同等學(xué)力英語作文批改：第49期

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　　ENTERING BIG CITIES

　　There is no denying the fact that It is a controversal topic that an increasing numerber of people go into big cities.Different people hold different opions on this issue.On the one hand,Some people leave their hometowns and come to strange big cities for a better job.On the other hand,they can live a better living.

　　Many others,however,hold the opposite view.In the first place,No one can take care of those children and elders who are left in the hometowns,When young man and young woman go into big cities.In the socend place,Competition becomes sharper and sharper in sociaty.last but not least,A few person have theirs houses themselves in big cities.

　　As far as I am concerned,Both sides have something right.Acturally,Entering big cities should be viewed as a two-edged sword,Which presents us both benefits and troubles.But we should not give up eatting for fear of choking,The best policy ,as I see,is to maximize their advantages and minimize their unhealthy influnces.So that they can benefit us in a better way.

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