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　　Do“ Lucky Number ”Really Bring Good Luck?

　　Many people thinks that some numbers could bring them good luck..So when they do some important things,they always see weather the number is lucky .For example, people like to search a lucky number days for marrigement.,such as September 9thmeans love for ever,and May 20th means I love you will be lucky days in their hart.

　　In my opinion lucky has no assiation with the number.Also take marrigement for example,not every people feel happiness though they get married in the same lucky day.Meanwhile other people married in some days seems unlucy,but they lived sweetly. Love is a flex feeling between people need the people do effort to implove, and the numbers can’t make so srong power to destroyed people’ good mood to their lover.

　　So,people should not have to pay so more attention to the numbers for gain good luck. There is an old saying,no pain no gain,If one had try his best he would reach the most achievement.

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