同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文批改：第32期

來源：育路教育網(wǎng) 時(shí)間：2011-07-01 11:15:48

　　同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文原文：

　　Do “Lucky Numbers” Really Bring Good Luck?

　　So many people think that different numbers will affect things what you do. For example, People love number seven in British that they think it will bring good luck for them, and they call it “luck seven”. Many chinese people love number six or number eight for the same reason. Chinese think six can help them do things that go well, and number eight will help you get more money, and so on.

　　I do not think that numbers will bring good or bad things to you. The number only can be used to calculate, express order and so on. The numbers just are numbers. If your telephone number was eight eight eight eight eight , would you be rich one day ? it is only a joke .if you want to be rich ,you must work hard, study hard. Fortune is occasional, you should not pay much attation to it。

　　名師點(diǎn)評(píng)：8—9分

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