同等學(xué)力英語作文批改：第23期

　　同等學(xué)力英語作文原文：

　　With the rapidly developing of society and economy,more and more people who lived in the country run into city for living .There is no denying the fact that bring us seas of   new problems.It abrupt the balance between country and city.
  
　　Just as every coin has two sides.That phenomenon has its own drawbacks which should not be neglected.First the poor knowledge which the more country's person have is easy bringin."g to.Some unhealthy case.Secondly the government face the problem on how to educate the children      who come to city in hurry,and improving their well houses to live .Last but not least,handling the ID card which the person have is difficult.But it have some positive facet.It brings some delight and strength,and tranfers the labour from country to city .It is the development by history.
  
　　In my opinion,it gives the government some new chanllenges.Such as in education ,medicine,environment ,house.But ,I claim that problem with working hard by someone who charge of that fact would be solved quickly.As a famous saying goes "where there is a will,There is a way.''

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