同等學力英語作文批改：第20期

　　同等學力英語作文原文：

　　There is no denying the fact that city expanding has become a grave problem with which this country is confronted. Some problems are aroused by many people are pouring in city. Taking a look around, we can find example too numerous to list.
  
　　While,people have come up with various obvious instances as listed below. Some point out many people pour in city that lead average city resources to decline,likeing as education resource、water resource.Many others consider that it could severely affect local people common life. Take social security as example.
  
　　Just as any coin has tow sides,it's no exception with many people pouring in city. City expanding can advance economic development.As far as I am concerned, we should not give up eating for chocking.In my opinion, we should try our best to make full use of its benefits while avoiding its shortcomings.

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