同等學(xué)力英語作文批改：第16期

　　同等學(xué)力英語作文原文：

　　I set myself against feeding pets

　　Recent years, with people living standard improvement, many bring up pets more and more. Pet market gets very hot. Many kind of small animal are lovely very much. However, yet someone don’t like these animal. There are several main opinions about feeding pets. One hand, supporters think that pets can bring many pleasant for people; another hand, opposed people think that feeding pets can cause many trouble, even unpredicted hurt. As a young man, I support the later.
 
　　There are some reasons for supporting my opinions. First, feeding pets need taking many time, but now I haven’t, because I am very busy every day. Second, for feeding pets there are some unpleasant smell in our house, and animal’s hair scatter all around, I don’t tolerant it. Third, some pets usually take many harmful bacteria, they can affect children and elder’s health.
 
　　With these disadvantage, t set myself against feeding pets.

　　名師點評：10分。

　　同學(xué)你好，你的結(jié)構(gòu)安排比較合理，只是在第二段論證自己觀點時要找有說服力的論據(jù)，不要拿自己說事，因為你個人只是個特例。

　　比如：你說養(yǎng)寵物需要花很多時間，你完全可以說幫寵物洗澡，會讓人分心等等。

　　注意一些表達方式的正確運用和語法問題。

　　加油！