同等學(xué)力英語作文批改：第14期

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　　An recreasing number of people feed pets and also it brings more and more matters. It is really a hotly debated topic currently. People's attitudes differ sharply on this issue. Some hold positive view. They think it is helpful to take care of pets and they love the pets. While the other people hold the opposite view. In their opinion, pets may bring some bateria or some disease to human. Also they makes the enviorment dirty.

　　Personally, i believe that both of them are partly true. Actually, pets are friends of human beings. They can accompany the lonely poeple and sometime they can help us.  Feeding pets alos show our living standard improved. On the other hand, we should bath them frequently so that their disease will not infect us.

　　The fact of feeding pets will not disapear. We should not prohibit it. We are only to conduct the fact to develop to a good direction. For example,  hold some lecture to submit the knowledge or the noted issue.

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