同等學力英語作文批改：第12期

　同等學力英語作文要求：

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic Keeping Pets. You should write at least 120 words and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:

　　近年來養(yǎng)寵物的人越來越多，造成的問題也越來越多，這一現(xiàn)象已引起社會各界的關(guān)注。人們對這一現(xiàn)象的看法不一，各持已見。
　　     
　　1. 你對這個問題的觀點是……
　      　
　　2. 理由是……
         
　　3. 結(jié)論……

　　同等學力英語作文原文：

　　The number of persons whom keeping pets is increasing for recently years, as a result many question is following. This phenomenon is concerned widely in society. Persons have several attitutions on this phenomenon.

　　My opinion for this phenomenon is positive if keeping pets take situable means. Firstly, animals are people’s good friends in globe, we should conserve their  existence enviorment.  secondly animals can provide much pleasure to people ,for example,mang people bring up dogs for solve their alonely. thirdly keeping pets can  educate  children’s loving heart ,and learn how to takeing care little animals.

　　In conclusion ,if people keeping pets take situable means for avoiding  affect  others,  I approve of keeping pets，it will　become our life more colourful.

　　名師點評：分數(shù)：8分。

　　你的思路還不錯，只是在安排結(jié)構(gòu)上你在段就應該闡述你自己的觀點，否則你現(xiàn)在的段就是多余的。另外，你需要注意單詞拼寫，大小寫和語法問題。還有標點符號的使用及空格問題。相信你只要把這些細節(jié)問題攻破后，你的作文水平會有很大的提高。加油哦！