同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文批改：第二期

　　同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文原文：

　　My View on Reform of Medical care in China

　　There is no denying the fact that medical expenses and difficult threatment is a grave problem with which our country are confronted in the present situation. Complaints are often heard from the people aroud us that they couldn’t pay for the medical cost. They are hard to have an appointment with a doctor in large hospital, because the doctor’s appointment is arranged fully. Acually, the problem has become so widepread that it has severely affected people’s live.

　　A number of factors account for the problem, but the leading reason might be inadequate medical care system and poor medical care environment. The hospital is a profit structure. They must try their best to earning the money to maintain the operation of hospitals. The absence of reasonable charges for medical care system will result in increasing cost. On the other hand, people flock to large hospital because of the lack of medical resources.

　　In view of the seriousness of this problem, effective measures must be taken before things get worse. First, it is essential that laws and regulaiongs be worked out and enforced to bind the doctor’s medical behavior. Secondly, the relevant government departments should allocate medical resources appropriately. With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that the problem will be soleved in the near future.

　　老師評(píng)語(yǔ)：

　　評(píng)語(yǔ)：得分8-10分

　　該文內(nèi)容基本符合寫(xiě)作要求，論述比較充分、詳實(shí)；但是語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤較多，有較多的單詞拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，表達(dá)錯(cuò)誤，名詞單復(fù)數(shù)等問(wèn)題。

　　建議在今后的學(xué)習(xí)中，多從英語(yǔ)基本功抓起，熟練正握基本語(yǔ)法知識(shí)，并且多言研習(xí)英文美文，學(xué)習(xí)其中的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)，以積累寫(xiě)作素材。